wow...again with the rhyme scheme - i liked that a lot. the idea of the poem was good, too. interesting and different.
~Mack and Ty

Ryan,
This poem is bloody brilliant!
Seriously, this poem is excellent.
I really LOVE your rhyming scheme!
It's incredible.
And that whole
'but daya will come when strength/is rare and color's left your thinning hair/ those sleepy hollow horrors/ haunting children's bedtime stories.'
Amazing!
You have the best rhyme scheme of anyone I know! GREAT JOB!!
KEEP WRITING!
NOW, **!
just kidding.