Gosh- some people are harsh.

I loved this poem. And I understood it completly, if anything I would put spaces between the lines to give them more impact, but that is more a stylistic thing than a quality thing. ^_^ Keep writing poems...

I thoght it was exelent i understood it completely. One of my fav. poems.

Good message, I like the last verse (from we have the power...and onwards) but I think the rest needs to be rewritten, something about the rhythm is off.

I think this whole poem is a mess, and I don't like anything about it at all, except for two lines:
"We have the power to remove power," and
"In the beginning there was darkness."
The last line is absolutely smashing, but unfortunately it is the only thing worth salvaging in this entire poem. The other line I like would do well in a work of prose (although I'm not entirely certain this isn't prose...), but not in a poem, at least not a poem like this one. Well at least it's nice to know that even with all your remarkable other work, you still write tossaways like this. Of course, I really do like the final line very much. Haha, sorry about the rather harsh review, but you write so much better than this. Write in a different direction...

see in my opinion this isn't good i dont hate it but i've read better in a childrens book you dont have to be such a smart ellic about things...you have no rhyme scheme no since and no meaning besides that of being alone which i can tell why you are! But im sure you dont care what i think but the same goes for you please just stay away from my writings I dont mind constructive criticism but i dont need u tellin me what i do wrong i know most of it i justy like writing what i feel and like i said if it's a bad poemn i wouldnt post it!

"We have the power to remove power."
Yes. We do.
I don't see why anyone else hasn't reviewed this. Insightful and well done, though I thought a few lines were rambling, and I just don't like the word "mortals." (Personal preference, though). Wicked last line.
-Jessica