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| OldJoe 2005-05-21 ch 7,   | I just read this over, and realized how cheesy it was. Huh. It took me a few months to realize that... |
| Billthegeek 2004-05-14 ch 11, | Don't know what to write? Perhaps try "bringing on" the story using dialogues, or introduce some new character or some gadget. If you've too many characters or gadgets to handle, get a bomb or something to BLAST them off!! *Evil laughter* |
| Kevin Noonan 2004-05-09 ch 12, | Finally! i'll try to write tomorrow. |
| biminator 2004-05-09 ch 12, | yeah, that was short. well, pretty good anyway. update soon. |
| Amazin'_Crazin' 2004-05-09 ch 12, | Wow, this is great. It's one of the best sci-fi's I've read on fictionpress! |
| biminator 2004-04-24 ch 11, | nice chappie. apparently, in my last review i forgot the last three chapters. i'm losing it. oh well, update soon. |
| Cimmerian 2004-04-24 ch 11, | Good story so far. Direct and effective. But I need a little more vivid description. You could write larger chapters if you put in more description. A little more colourful overture, if you get my meaning. Keep it up, though. I like it. |
| Kevin Noonan 2004-04-24 ch 11, | Excellence. Just pure excellence. You give me so many ideas. |
| biminator 2004-04-23 ch 10, | nice job with the last three chappies that i didn't get to review. update soon. |
| Billthegeek 2004-04-22 ch 9, | Keep going! |
| Rupert Greenwich 2004-04-18 ch 9, | HAWAIIAN PUNCH! You know, the crimson liquid. |
| Billthegeek 2004-04-17 ch 5, | Wow! That was really exciting! By the way, this is the first piece of sci-fi writing I've ever read (I always read fantasy). |
| biminator 2004-04-17 ch 9, | interesting chapter. little short, though. btw thanks for giving a good review for my uber-short weird thingie. |
| OldJoe 2004-04-16 ch 9, | Yes, I guess it is like Halo. That wasn't on purpose, but probably patially due to the fact my older brother was playing while I wrote this... |
| Kevin Noonan 2004-04-16 ch 9, | Again, pure excellence. It sounds kind of like Halo. |