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I love the /till death do us part and now death has come/ section! Awesome write on my friend write on love always silk and lace ~Kaylee~ BUSSIONS

this is definitely one of the angrier poems of yours that I've read. I think the line "To invite you to eternal sleep" is very shocking and vivid. It's sort of haunting, like it's an invitation "yippee" but "eternal sleep" uh oh!! But it's so much better than "death". Nice word choice!

Oh I love this song, partly because it kinda happened to my friend and to my other friend...
I love this song, has a nice anger tinge to it, but not to much, it's perfect with it's own style. Nicely done!
~*~ColdnessWithin13

I... am... shocked! Brilliant.

It's a hurty song...it really gets me. It's good though.

Good song, I really like the lyrics.

i really liked this...i lyk alot of ur stuff well done! keep it up.

Again with the greatness of your writing...oh and thanks for the newest review you gave me...I really appreciate it...anyway...love the way the words flowed...donnu...altogether good...
ANNA

Spiffy. I love this song//poem. It would probably be one of those songs I listen to over and over and over again until my brother bursts in and yells at me to turn it off. hehe. Thanks for the reviews. Until the next one.

ooh somewhat depressing, but i like it that way! **grins** i wish i could hear your songs, they rock so much!

whoa this is awesome, i really like this one! i love the chorus, and this line:
Till death do us part and now death comes
great job buddy, luv ya!

hola! songs! *singing*
this one was totally awesome!! i loved the chorus too! but i think my favorite part was the last real "verse" where after every line it would say "I'll end you." that just...man! *hugs* it's incredible!! and this time for me, homework calls, but i still procrastinate to no end! ^.~
THE END!
(until the next review!)

It's annoying that you don't accept annonymous reviews...I don't feel like signing in...oh well...anyway's i just wnated to say tres bien!
Luv Always
Debbie
P.S. I love my groupie ;)

*grumbles* fine i'll sign in to review :P!
nice song, its AMAZING! i love it! its so full of passion and emtion, it's crazy! it's wow!
i'm sorry you had to go though that pain though, no one deserves to at all. but either way, least you got a terrific song out of it ;)