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| Wrathful Diana 2004-04-16 ch 1,  | abuseA little perverted but then again I'm the one who wrote "Satan's Concubine" It's a great poem in my opinion, keep up with this (I liked it better than the environmental poem because it's a lot more emotional and heartfelt) ~Nymph |
| Bella Vengence 2004-04-14 ch 1, | abuseGreat writing keep it up. ~Nina~ |
| Tcat 2004-04-14 ch 1, | abuseGood. I like the fact that you make it apparent that this is imagination and not something real and past. "I WANT YOU TO CARESS MY SKIN, AS YOU WOULD CARESS A KITTEN," --this is corny to me, sorry, it looks like you were really trying hard to fit the ryhme, try to find something else... smitten, bitten, etc. other than that I like the flow you've got going on here. Just as a side not for future reference stay away from using 'and' at the being of a line such as "AND LOOK AT ME IN ADMIRATION," this weakens what is being said and can detract from its meaning and power. BUt neways, good job! I liked it. Good read. |
| Sparkling Rose 2004-04-13 ch 1, | abusevery nice writing scheme, good work! ^.^ ~*~SparklingRose~*~ |