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| MeZzeDUpGuRL 2007-06-14 ch 2,   | Umm, yeah, uhh...You read some other stuff in fiction press right? And you know how they double space it? I just, you know, i'm not trying to say anything bad or anything, but it would do you real good if you double spaced it, coz its more...convinient and understandable. Yes, yes. Okay? See yah. -Jessi |
| J Briones 2007-04-29 ch 35, | I love this story! Please update soon! Awesome job! Jess |
| J Briones 2007-04-20 ch 35, | Please, PLEASE, please finish this story. I really like it. I started it last night and had I not gotten so tired I would have finished it. I love it, please continue. J Briones |
| merrymowmow 2007-04-02 ch 35, | I was wondering when you're going to update? |
| ANGEL992210 2007-03-11 ch 35, | Amazing story. |
| Jackjohnsonfan 2007-02-02 ch 35, | Great chapter. loved this story all the way through. glad you updated. please write more soon! x |
| DaRk TiNk 2006-11-23 ch 34, | i totally loved the story im not sure if its done yet but if it is i think it shouldnt finish just yet unless your planning to do a thrid part ot it anyways review my story and my poems plz and thnk u! |
| I_am_the_bomb 2006-07-30 ch 30, | lol ok abit of advice i think u shuld put more decriptions in ur chapters and maybe make them longeralso at the beginning i think theyre moving too fast but nevertheless awesome fic!! hope u get more reviews u deserve it! rock on! |
| tinA 2006-07-23 ch 34, | i loved the whole thing=] |
| Jillian Taylor 2006-05-23 ch 33, | I thought that maybe you were laying on the emotions a bit too thickly. I have noticed that both Jimmy and Olivia seem to break up with each other and then go running back to each other, repeatedly. I know if I was in a relationship like Olivia and Jimmy's I wouldn't be able to emotionally handle all this wishy washy-ness. The pregnant twist at the end of Chapter 34 is very, very overdone, not to say that you will not handle this well. I just want to say that, in general, the 'I'm pregnant' twist is very hard to handle and sometimes proves to derail the whole story. Other than those few things I thought that the grammar, another pet peeve of mine, was for the most part accurate. Keep writing! -Jillian |
| Water Block 2006-03-04 ch 2, | I don't really like jimmy. (The formatting is a little cramped) |
| Water Block 2006-03-04 ch 1, | Interesting show of the drasitcally contrasting personality types. |
| radarvb13 2006-01-27 ch 19, | i don't like that |
| radarvb13 2006-01-27 ch 16, | Twenty bucks says he ends up in Bosnia with her as a surprise |
| Kythia 2006-01-21 ch 3, | I started reading your story becasue the summery sounded cool, and also because the title is one of my favorite songs. I really like it so far. Slightly chiche, but very nice none the less. At the end, you say 'under my skin,' which is also a song really high on my favorite's list... lol! ~Kythia |