Okay- I'm going to be honest- I normally don't understand the effects of saying a mantra, but somehow this poem gave me some very deep shivers when I read it! *nods* Your work brings forth some strong 'vibrations'- keep it up! :-D I am always eager to read the products of your talent!

Absolutely gorge. I loved it. You're right. When you kinda stress the underlined words it workd really well. It had a great flow, and was just really good. I loved the theme as well, and it was really deep. I loved the title too, very cool. Keep up the excellent writing. This is goiung on my fave stories list.
from fawny

I don't like how the words are underlined - it makes your readers feel stupid, that they couldn't have figured out that the last word of the previous line was the first word of the next line.

I do like the poem, though. Keep writing.

~Namir Swiftpaw