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| squiggle-line 2006-01-29 ch 1,  | abuseOh, wow.I love how the narrator doesn't have a name. And the heaven allusion is really nice too. Minor grammar things but solid content. Really very nice. Okay, I know I'm being totally unhelpful but I'm just in awe...still trying to digest everything.Nice piece. |
| J. Ryder 2005-10-08 ch 1, | abuseOn one hand, I like the fact that the story is so enigmatic so that it leaves you with a bunch of questions. But it feels too short. Your story can definitely be longer. Hope you're able to solve your writing problem. My writer's block is driving me crazy. |
| faery tragedy 2005-08-21 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this--and I think it'll stay with me for awhile. The tone reminded me of that in "The Perks of Being a Wallflower" because it was blunt and honest. It's easy to relate to, also. The only problem I have, however, is that I think you have typos with periods...but then again, fictionpress is screwy and might have done that on its own. Anyway, nice job. I can see why you won that contest. *fearytragedy |
| Lavender Knight 2005-08-15 ch 1, | abuseOh, wow, I was just looking back at your dear old profile and stumbled upon this.That's very real and it reminds me of my own days in the "heavenly" world. E, ganja, and the like.I remember how I kept telling myself that I would stop soon, but it was about knowing that I could stop at any time.Whatever, enough angst.I love you for this one.Keep up the writing and don't delete stuff no matter what you might think, you're a diamond who needs to sparkle.Lots o' love.Cheers! |
| SixAveHrtache 2004-08-16 ch 1, | abuseWow...very cryptic. 'Tis lovely! Anyway--You left me a review asking if I had any ideas for your story...and I don't at the moment but if you ever want to discuss it or if you need a beta or anything, feel free to e-mail me at goldngrly9867@aol.com or IM me (if you have aol or aim) at SixAveHrtache. |
| poohba 2004-04-18 ch 1, | abuseI like how you've reworked this. There's a lot more suspense here than there was in the first version. It makes me want to read on to another chapter to find out exactly what did happen to Auz and Starr. |
| brittanga 2004-04-14 ch 1, | abuseNice ending... open, but good. I'd pelt you with a million questions about 'what really happened' but that would be annoying and take away from the entire purpose of an open ending. Good job, and I know you probably feel like I'm probing, but are you okay? I mean, do you think you're getting better? Please don't feel like you have to answer. I know I *hated* it when people asked me if I was okay when I was anorexic. But I guess I just want you to know that even someone who's never even seen you before can care. Hope you're better soon, and I hope for more updates, but no pressure, 'cuz pressure sucks. |