wow, defiantly original. i've never read anything like it before, but you have tons of describtion (why can i NEVER spell that word?) and imagery. one suggestion for you though: the last line say 'and then i wake up' i think you should change it to: and then i wake.' -shrug- merely a suggestion. oh and thank you for your reviews and critizm. yes...

Artistic with unique vision (even if it's a nightmare). I like the positioning of the sentence "I can't keep up with myself".

You have such detailed, elaborate dreams that make unbelivable poetry. I love these lines and the way you structured them.
"I can't keep,
Up,
With,
Myself."
It's as though you're panting and out of breath as you try to keep up with yourself.
Hawke

I really like the way that you have structured this poem, Matt. Great work. I also enjoyed the last three/four stanzas with the constant flow. I think the final line was the coolest *G*. Keep it up and write on!
-Ryan

*applauds* Very good! Keep up the awesome work! :)

Wow, that's quite a poem. More like a nightmare! Once again, a fabulous poem.
agid

ah dreams... i like dreams. sometimes. nice dream :P
i hope youre not one who plans on uploading 7 to 30 a day like u know who... and i mean daily for a long period of time. if so, pls tell me so i can take u off of author alerts for now ;) if ur not gonna do that and u can keep to 5 or under then its all good ;) !
yup yup :D nice nice writing!
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