Another very well written poem; you have a natural gift here. My advice would be nurture it and consider later publication.
Very Well Done.
Keep Writing!
F.C
Thanks for the reviews and I hope you enjoy the other works as much =) The style of poetry I use, is completely my own. If you like you could call it "Cortez" ;). Your thoughts and kind words are as always appreciated.

Hm, very interesting. I like how you melded the fantasy and real-life. Usually I give a bit of constructive criticism but not with poems. My belief is that you can't really teach someone how to write poetry. Anyone can write it if they have the feeling. Anyway, as for you favorite books you mentioned in your profile, I've read The Seer and the Sword. Also, if you like to read fantasy books, I suggest Eragon, the Artemis Fowl books(although I've only read the first one sadly. It was very good), and books by Robert Jordan. And another one I read, which wasn't fantasy but was kind of a sci-fi and was one of the best books I've ever read, is The House of the Scorpion by Nancy Farmer. Keep Writing and happy reading.
Sayonara,
Artemisia IV

I think that poem was really deep. Good job.

OH MY GOD KAITLYN! i love this so much! ah i hate you!! i wish i could've wrote something this great!! ah

Wow, are we on a metaphorical spree, deary? Yay I love this poem

Hey Kaitlyn! I was just looking at the "just in" stuff and I saw your name up there and I knew I had to check it out! Awsome job hun! As always, I love it! The description and idea was amazing! =D