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JtheChosen1 2008-01-19 ch 7,	abusethis is an AMAZING story! i hope that u re-continue it, it looks amazing, especially all the subtle plotting and the humor woven in. again, hope u continue this soon!
meneeale 2007-12-18 ch 8,	abuseThis story is amazing, Im upset that its on hiatus. A very nice story nonetheless, I hope that you write to me back telling when you have revamped it.
leemya 2007-10-03 ch 8,	abuseHi, it's been a long time now, will you be updating this story any time soon? Great Story by the way!
Forgotten Raven Goddess 2006-04-16 ch 8,	abuseNO! Don't change it. I love it the way it is. I like how the characters are progressing and the few new twists in the plot. I have a question though on Kireo, since he heals fast shouldnt his hair grow fast as well?
diff-me 2005-08-18 ch 8,	abuseAw gosh, this story's so cute.Critique?Err, I'm so bad at it.I know I was terribly confused at the first flashback to Kiero's past, and nyou described all the men by their haircolour.. And since it was only labeled 'the past' I wasn't sure as to who was who.Maybe it was supposed to be all mysterious and such, but heck I was confused. Please continue. I really like this story. It makes me gush. Haha.
passingreader 2005-06-27 ch 8, anon.	abuseI'm sorry to see that this story is on hiatus. I really like the characters and am interested to see how the plot will develop (though I do have some ideas of my own). Adjero is evil and combined with the "stranger" will, I'm sure, make Kireo's life as miserable has possible. My only criticism is the use of flashbacks. Some are okay, but I wish that the longer ones would stay as one instead of broken up between scenes in the present. Still, an intriguing story that I hope to see more of. I look forward to whatever improvements you choose to make.
Eva Kasumi 2005-04-01 ch 8,	abuseWow... this is absolutely amazing. The plot you've got going and the obvious love you have for your characters really keeps this story ticking. And although I'm antsy for updates, I'm really glad to hear you're going to be revamping this, because... well, have you ever considered getting this published? I really think you could. You've got the makings of an excellent novel here. It'd need some tightening, obviously, and it would be good to see some expansion, especially more details on the setting/landscape, some of the minor characters, and on the history of the world it takes place in. But the foreshadowing builds beautifully, the plot twists are completely unexpected, and the relationships between the characters are wonderful. I can tell you honestly love the characters and the story - perhaps something that seems obvious since you're writing it at all, but many authors in the real publishing world simply churn out novels to make a living. For anyone on FictionPress, that's obviously not the case, and that right there gives you a leg-up in the quality of your work. Of course, you may not want to get it published. I'm just speaking as someone whose ultimate dream is to be the accomplished author of something like this. ^^; This story actually reminded me in the beginning of one of my favorite novels of all time: 'Luck in the Shadows' by Lynn Flewelling. That is the kind of book I aspire to writing. I wouldn't have called your attention to it for fear of disrupting your creative flow or something, but you said you aleady have this entirely planned out in your head. I highly recommend you check Lynn Flewelling out, although you may decide it's better to wait until after you've finished this. Up to you. ^^ But that being said, I bet you'd love the novel. Anyway, those are my thoughts. I'm really looking forward to reading more of this, and if you'd like anyone to bounce ideas off of, I'd be happy to help; contact info is on my profile. I hope you achieve whatever dreams you may have for this story and for any yet to come. I'll be reading. ^_^
wing 2005-03-28 ch 8,	abuseoh, gasp! ah, it's okay i suppose, but to be honest, i really don't see what you need to change! minor problems... i don't even remember any! but seriously, i loved the action scenes and dialogue and descriptions! you were just fab. ^_^ don't mind if you change things, just hope you'll come back someday! your characters are unforgettable! ^_^- ciao.
yaoi-sonata (YS) 2005-02-14 ch 1, anon.	abuseno! no scene skip! no!
Sh'arra Rie 2004-12-08 ch 7,	abuseNO NO NO NO! You must update! Please? gives you a kicked kitty look Realy, I like this story and hope that you are going to updaye soon.
Nikerym 'Ksherea 2004-12-04 ch 1,	abusetest. testing. one. two. three. four. bahahahahahahahaha... done now...
wing 2004-12-02 ch 7,	abusewha awsome chappie! no i'm not gonna abandon you, so sorry! loved these chapters, so good! awsome how the plot's working out! can't wait for the next chap! ^_^ keep it up, you're so good!
wing 2004-12-01 ch 6,	abusewha awsome chappie, so sorry i didn't check up on you! i'm off to read the other chap tmrw, PROMISE, okay?? so sorry! [oh, and about the e-mail... sry... i don't read at all... but damn, you've got such AWSOME fans!! ;_; make me feel shoo small...] anyways, so sorry, and this chap was so kewl! loved it! ^_^ ::gives them both lotsa hugs:: okay, i'll review again soon! ::munches on her magic brownie::
Soutai 2004-12-01 ch 7,	abuseReally. Really. Really. Good. _ This story... -spazz- It's the type of story that I never want to stop reading. I wish it was a book so I wouldn't have to stop. For sure, this story is extremely hard to put down. Started reading, and when I had to go to bed yesterday, I nearly died. Please, whatever you do, don't discontinue. It'll be just like one of the other stories I read, in which they never finished and it was a major disappointment on my part. It was getting so good, too... Anyway, keep up the good work. Usually, I point out stuff wrong with the story, but here I don't find anything. Or maybe I'm just so oblivious because I'm too busy reading. I ramble a lot. Sorry if I annoyed you. O_o Keep up the good work. ^_^
LYK 2004-12-01 ch 7,	abuseYay, brownies! Man, the whole thing with Jeremiad being alive totally caught me off guard. ^^ Kinda made me wonder why he didn't set up any elaborate plans to save poor Kireo. Anyway, I really enjoyed this chapter (of course), and can't wait for another! ^_^

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