|Reviews for The Jasuthka|
| AdamsApple 12/6/11 . chapter 8
I find this story amazing, with a really wonderful and interesting plot. I'm already a major fan! I would love to see it continued. I don't see much that could be improved, I find it really good. I love your writing style. Just one thing, you keep spelling 'tonight' as 'tonite'. Other than that, awesome. I hope you continue, or revamp. I'll be waiting! :3
| SilverSymbol 7/28/11 . chapter 8
Considering it's been 6 years since you've written in this story, I don't think you'll be finishing it. Which I'm kinda bummed about. I love mysterious blondes who have angst and are young and are cute and have a cute older guy who has integrity, to love them.
Anyanyany chance at aaaaall that you'll write some more?
| CinderellaWithCombatBoots 8/24/09 . chapter 8
Boo!...Sorry. I'm childish like that sometimes. When I have coffee at least. And hyper. Which I am right now. My fingers are twitching writing this right now, haha. Damn coffee. It doesn't even taste nice! I drink it with no milk and six sugars. So maybe it's just the sugar. No wonder my foster worker would never let me have any sweet things as a child. And no wonder I'm re-acting like this. But come ON! Coffee is so...so...blurgh. Haha. Anyways. I really really loved the story and the reason I may have...booed you *coughs and straightens clothes* is because I hate goddamn hiatus'. They're annoying. I really really hope you haven't given up on the story because I really loved it and no doubt the re-newed version will be even better. So, please, please update soon. When...or if...you do, I'll be sure to give a long detailed review. And I'll not drink coffee so I'm in a right enough mind to do it...haha.
| Caisele 3/19/09 . chapter 1
LOVE THIS STORY!
you can email me from my profile :D
| MAGICAL.NARRATOR 12/30/08 . chapter 8
I was gonna say that i cant wait until the next update but i can see that you havn't updated in almost 4 years. I really hope you havn't given up on this story. In my honest opinion i do not think that this story should be changed. I personally love the way the story has developed. Specifically, the way the two charcters didnt immediately jump into bed with each the first chance they .
An update would make a lovely new years gift. ]
| cajun-cuteness 11/27/08 . chapter 8
YOU HAVE TO UPDATE! A 3 YR GAP IS TO BIG! UPDATE NOW!
| mad-one123 9/29/08 . chapter 2
doh! i thought it was ALL going to be centred on the two main characters getting some hunka hunka burning live from eachother! phooey. oh well im still enjoying ur story immensly and shall continue! woho
| mad-one123 9/29/08 . chapter 1
wow this is so interesting! and its not so complex that i cant understand it, which is good for me, since my brain is the size of a peanut. so yeah must keep reading! really liked ur first chapter!
| JtheChosen1 1/19/08 . chapter 7
this is an AMAZING story! i hope that u re-continue it, it looks amazing, especially all the subtle plotting and the humor woven in.
again, hope u continue this soon!
| shinseichieien 12/18/07 . chapter 8
This story is amazing, Im upset that its on hiatus. A very nice story nonetheless, I hope that you write to me back telling when you have revamped it.
| leemya 10/3/07 . chapter 8
Hi, it's been a long time now, will you be
updating this story any time soon?
Great Story by the way!
| Forgotten Raven Goddess 4/16/06 . chapter 8
NO! Don't change it. I love it the way it is. I like how the characters are progressing and the few new twists in the plot. I have a question though on Kireo, since he heals fast shouldnt his hair grow fast as well?
| diff-me 8/18/05 . chapter 8
Aw gosh, this story's so ?Err, I'm so bad at it.I know I was terribly confused at the first flashback to Kiero's past, and nyou described all the men by their haircolour.. And since it was only labeled 'the past' I wasn't sure as to who was it was supposed to be all mysterious and such, but heck I was confused.
Please continue. I really like this story. It makes me gush. Haha.
| passingreader 6/27/05 . chapter 8
I'm sorry to see that this story is on hiatus. I really like the characters and am interested to see how the plot will develop (though I do have some ideas of my own). Adjero is evil and combined with the "stranger" will, I'm sure, make Kireo's life as miserable has possible.
My only criticism is the use of flashbacks. Some are okay, but I wish that the longer ones would stay as one instead of broken up between scenes in the present.
Still, an intriguing story that I hope to see more of. I look forward to whatever improvements you choose to make.
| corkscrewed 4/1/05 . chapter 8
Wow... this is absolutely amazing. The plot you've got going and the obvious love you have for your characters really keeps this story ticking. And although I'm antsy for updates, I'm really glad to hear you're going to be revamping this, because... well, have you ever considered getting this published? I really think you could. You've got the makings of an excellent novel here. It'd need some tightening, obviously, and it would be good to see some expansion, especially more details on the setting/landscape, some of the minor characters, and on the history of the world it takes place in. But the foreshadowing builds beautifully, the plot twists are completely unexpected, and the relationships between the characters are wonderful. I can tell you honestly love the characters and the story - perhaps something that seems obvious since you're writing it at all, but many authors in the real publishing world simply churn out novels to make a living. For anyone on FictionPress, that's obviously not the case, and that right there gives you a leg-up in the quality of your work. Of course, you may not *want* to get it published. I'm just speaking as someone whose ultimate dream is to be the accomplished author of something like this. ;
This story actually reminded me in the beginning of one of my favorite novels of all time: 'Luck in the Shadows' by Lynn Flewelling. *That* is the kind of book I aspire to writing. I wouldn't have called your attention to it for fear of disrupting your creative flow or something, but you said you aleady have this entirely planned out in your head. I highly recommend you check Lynn Flewelling out, although you may decide it's better to wait until after you've finished this. Up to you. But that being said, I bet you'd love the novel.
Anyway, those are my thoughts. I'm really looking forward to reading more of this, and if you'd like anyone to bounce ideas off of, I'd be happy to help; contact info is on my profile. I hope you achieve whatever dreams you may have for this story and for any yet to come. I'll be reading. _