Hey! I just wanted to tell you that I love how you write! I think what intruges me most, is the fact that this is real! I added you as a friend over LJ, but I'm wondering, are you ever going to update again?

kudos, and I think, no, I'm pretty sure, I love you!

So, I read the whole thing in one go. I feel slightly dizzy, but I WILL keep on reading it.
I don't think I've ever been so conflicted, in terms of my emotion.

You made me laugh; you made me cry.
I saw hope; I saw despair.
There was love; there was heartbreak.

There's no doubt about it. I've read a lot of stories in my life, but I've neevr felt so emotionally connected. Your words are entrancing. I applaud you, from the bottom of my heart.
I guess this is the point, too, where I'm supposed to tell you how shocking I find that this is your own life story. I am shocked, let me assure you. It seems so well written that you could convince anyone it was all fake. I'm stunned, I really am, but to the point where I don't feel it.

I'd probably like to ask you a thousand questions about this... but I'll read the livejournal stuff first, I think.

hey, its me. one of your devote readers. I remember a while back you said you wanted to take down your story because people were saying things about it? Im not sure, but I really want you to consider publishing this book here:


its such a fantastic site for us writers. im waiting to get my laptop fixed so I can jump on it and start creating my book.
it gives you options of what cover you want and design, adding you're own photographs and EVERYTHING. I am realy excited for you to do this because not only can you publish this, the site can make copies and actually have people buy the book you made!
please tell me what you think? :)
-ashely

You are very brave. I have enough trouble writting...scenes like that...een when they are fictional. To actualy be able to put enough detail and emotion into something like that and have it bassed in truth...wow. I aplaude your bravery and talent.

Alright, so normaly I would wait till I read the enitre story and leave you one huge review at the end. I am so inspired to compliment you right now though, that I just can't wait. Firstly, this story is amazing on so many levels. From a wrtting point of view, it has good plot and charactere development, your settings are interesting and well described and the over all 'flow' is excellent. I'm probably not the most qualified to say this, but there were no spelling or gramer mistakes that i have noticed. (i may have missed some because seriously, spelling/grammer is the bane of my existense, lol.) Novice-type stories like the ones posted here are so much better when they seem as profesional as this, you know, with no mistakes and such. I guess you can pass my compliments on to whoever edits your work as well. Props for profetionalism! (please ignore the spelling of that word...)

I think it's amazing that this story is a true story. I am a huge fan of the 'real life dramas' but have never encountered one that was actually real life. the way this is written, sort of biographical, sort of memoir is really interesting. Soemone once told me that the best way to write is to write about waht you know. The funny thing is, when i read 'real life' stories, i'm alwasy like, that doesn't actualy happen. Aparently it does. your life is really interesting!
I wanted to write my personal story some day. Then I realized it would probaly be depressing and definatly boring. I'm still waiting for my happy ending.
So, now that i have left you an epic review, i will read the rest of your story! Know that I think you as a writer are amazing and that this story is extremly well written and very inspiring, on a personal level for me as well as an inspiration to write more. you rock.
Also, I want to mention that I adore the diction in this story- you know, like word choice? of course you do...Anyway, i love European authors because the words are so much cooler than Canadains. Our claim to fame is 'eh' and thats pretty much it. lol So, once again, i'll bid you farewell and wish you luck on all future writting endevors and wherever else life might take you.
~Iconic
(ps. this is the longest review i have ever written...)

I LIKE CALVIN. ... D: DIDN'T YOU STILL LIVE WITH HIM? IM SO CONFUSED. didnt you live with your parents and then you went with calvin? how did that work outt. @__@

ohmygod. i think i said i hated calvin in one of my reviews. but d'aw. hes confusing and prettyful at the same time. but i dunno. uh oh. clappy. >.>

BLAH. calvin pisses me off. he does that just for money? art? jerk. jerkity jerk jerk. i miss clap. hesa sweetie. and nice.

ah. i love clapp. hes so cuute. i love how you were all denial about being gay and then you made out with clap. and you're like ... NO WONDER PEOPLE KEEP CALLING ME GAY. or something like that. dont hit me if im wrong? haha.

d'aw. i like calvin. even though hes like. ... weird. he talks funny. but i think thats just me. the way you describe him is SO. HOT. sometimes i wish i were a guy. then i could have some awesome gay fantasy or something. but i probably wouldn't. because then id be like. god i wish i didnt wish to be a guy and endure all this stuff. ... but still.

ahahaha. this chapter is so awkwardd. i wouldve felt embarrassed if i were you. this was like, confusing, awkward, angry, happy, and relieving all at the same time. im still trying to like, process all of this. haha. denial?

Your story is very good. It's even better knowing that this is your real experience and emotions through the ups and downs of your life. I wish I could have brought you over to where I live in San Francisco where I see couples of all genders holding hands. "No one can make you feel inferior without your consent." Eleanor R.

Hmm, just somethign from last chapter: you use the adjective 'calculating' a lot. A hell of a lot. Especially to describe Calvin. I'm sure he is calculating, but surely there are more adjectives than simply that?
I don't know why I always sound like such a frigid bitch in my reviews. I just do, I guess.

This chapter was...I'm almost starting to feel all warm and fuzzy inside, now that there's some daylight getting into the insides of that metaphorical closet. Almost. yes. Almost. But not quite. It takes a lot for me to feel something other than anger. Oh well.

I think you've really got into the swing of this biography (I wonder why it isn't categorised as such?), even if you've already finished it, I thought I should say that.

Sadly, I have other things to get done now, so I'll probably have to stop reviewing for today. Or maybe I won't. But either way, I'll try to come back to this soon.

As regards favouriting this...yes. I think I will. It's quite pacy and engaging. I would favourite author you too, as your writing (this piece in particular) reflects you very strongly (I assume) and I quite like your writing, but I'm not sure if you even frequent this site anymore, so I guess I'll just not. I'll guess that you won't respond to these reviews anyway, so...yeah. So.

I feel a little hollow for some reason. Great chapter. The ending bordered on poetic (in a good way). &^.^&

It was emotive. Very much so. I still think that, despite Calvin's admissions, he's a bit overbearing. And the way he speaks is a little...condescending to say the least.

But that's just a layman's opinion. Yes. Layman's.
I don't know why I keep repeating myself like that. I don't usually. I usually sound more human...oh well.

All together, if I had a bigger heart, I'd say this was quite a moving chapter :D. I liked the show of solidarity at the end, with the scrunching up of the check. And I'm more sure than ever that this is set in England. Yes. England. Good job (I hadn't meant that to sound patronising or sarcastic. Sorry if it came across that way).

"You know, when I think of it now, I wonder if Tony were really just playing games with my head."- that's you speaking in hindsight. Which is not bad in itself, but you just gave a lot away. I've now formed assumptions that Tony's gay or bi. I just think that line shouldn't be there ^^.

And meh! I was so certain this was set in England; Surrey and all, but...I've never heard of a sky train before O.O. Admittedly I don't live in a city. But all the same. Yeah. All the same.

Am I the bitchiest reviewer you've had yet? Do tell!

Oo...Tony got burned...and *cough* it's spelt 'Jawohl'.

Aww. Gee. The ending was sweet. I like Clap. Yes. I like him. I think I might favourite this story soon. Maybe.