I really like the pattern of the stanzas. I tried to do that once but failed miserably. This poem doesn't seem to have much sense or point, but it's very well made.

Thats really good!! I wish I could write poems like that!!

I like! A better title would be helpful, but the poem isn't really that short. It's laconic in a sense, but conveys what it conveys. It also has the advantage of the rhyme not feeling forced. Interesting style, very interesting.

I think it's a very good poem, I like how you use the same sentences again in different stanzas, I hardly noticed at first, but something was familiar when I was reading it so I went and read it more thouroughly and, yeah. I think it's very good.

i like the way it repeats itself, i liked it! please R&R sum of my stuff too, thanx!