Interesting concept, I am looking forward to reading some more. However I am kind of wondering why this is in the historical catagory?

I'm glad you updated! Anoter good chapter... I'm looking forward to reading more!

It's been a while since you've updated... are you planning on continuing?
I'm, REALLY anxious to read more!
Oh well, I bet your just taking your time... I shouldn't complain because sometimes I take a while to update to...
I'm looking forward to reading more!
-Caitlin

wow th@ is weird...gd tho

I liked how you made improving her grammar part of the story, very clever! I'm starting to understand the goverment system and culture more now! THis is really coming together and I assume it will only get better!Just one request, could you write more about her life, you know, daily actvities ect? Good luck, I'm looking forward to reading more.

Ok, so this Canon dude is giving people jobs and people "share," (I assume there's no money system then, right?) but he's still not controlling where the people live and what their social class is. He's not killing people who disagree with him either, that's kinda cool. So, you're right to say that it's a warped sort of communism. You could give it a name if you wanted to...
You kinda contradicted yourself by saying that Canon made the rules, but then saying that there weren't any rules. Or was it just to add to this kid's charecter? It just didn't come off that way to me. Confusion makes her more real, though.
But again, you should add more details. How did he come to power? Even people in a communist country would know that. It would just make the story better, and everyone who would read this would understand it more too. It'll probably be cleared up in the next few chapters though...I hope. *grins*
If I'm coming off as "harsh," just tell me, because I'm only trying to help. And, yep, it's starting to make a lot more sense. Keep it up and post again soon!

It's kinda funny that her spelling and grammer is much better in spanish than her english, even though english is her first language. It is, right?
Could there be more on her life though? I mean, it's nice that she's finally learning grammer and all...
It's getting better, mind you. But just a little more description should do it.
Can't wait for your next update. Ha! That rhymed...nevermind.

I like this! The grammar in the beginning is somewhat hard to understand, but it makes the story a lot more realistic. I hope to read more soon ^-^!

you haven't updated in a while... maybe your just taking your time though... anyway I really hope you write more to this story! I really like it and am looking forward to reading more!

I think this story has a lot of potentional, just a few suggestions...
First, you might want to talk a little more about the society the story takes place in, I think your talking a little to much about the past. And how can she be writing if knoledge is unheard of?
Also, how is it a communist country if their are know rules? Communist were very, very strict and wanted everyone to be idenical.
And, why does she keep using spanish words? I found that sort of confusing since you said the whole world was part of America so wouldn't they be speaking english.
I also think your story would be much better if you didn't constantly use abbreviations like "4" instead of "for, or "b" instead of "be".
Other then that I really like it. Sorry if my advice came out as mean critisim, please don't take it the wrong way. I hope you right more, but you might want to put it in a diffrent section, it doen't really fit history.

No offense, but if this girl's part chinese, why does she speak some words in spanish?
Other than that, it's pretty interesting, but you're hardly giving ANY facts about how the society is, except that there's no rules or school. o_O You pretty much got the language right though, in a diary, some people, like your charecter, wouldn't bother to write out small phrases like "By the way." But, it gets a bit ridiculous when you start substituting "be" with "b."
You might also try using another name for the world too. It would show how much the world has changed. It's merely a suggestion. However, how would the country be communist if everyone's allowed to do what they want? It's sounds like the opposite of communism to me.
Also, it might help if you place this in a different category, maybe like "General," "Young Adult," or even "sci-fi." This fic's simply in the wrong category.
Don't take this as a flame, it's just some constructive critisism that could help make your fic better. Sorry if it came off as harsh, that wasn't my intention.
However, I think that your idea is a good one and shows imagination. Good work on that!