really good. i liked the rythm, it added to the already strong emotion the poem gives. *S*

Depressing poems make up about 60% of all the poetry we get submitted, so no one's going to be upset by it. ;)
Anyway, I found it easy to understand, personally. I think that alot of people can relate to this. Awesome job!
Just a friendly tip though: try not to emphasize words with bold/italic or with caps. It's really up to you wether to do it or not, but you'll find that people tend to find emphasis by themselves.

powerful! i like it!