|Reviews for A Darker Shade of Pale|
| Manuel Fajar 12/1/04 . chapter 1
Death—the Aztecs still give death its day—full of food and festivities. We, moderns, act as if we can evade her enticing ways; but, there's her little dance book with everybody's name; and, her polite manners to always make a call, even if she's got to do it more than once; and, then there's her caresses soft siren silken—¿Who can resist her? Which is to say—neat poem! m
| CoolBeans18s 5/13/04 . chapter 2
Wow - this was so wonderful to start with, yet you have achieved to perfect perfection! You've still captivated everything from the first piece, while adding so much more depth and feeling - Its wonderful - er!
| Children of the Root 5/1/04 . chapter 2
I do love the changes! Its still awesome like before. This one flows better, I think, though.
| Mime 4/28/04 . chapter 2
I see some good changes you made from the first draft, but this is posseses the same sinistry. Awesome job!
| Aimee Raven 4/27/04 . chapter 2
OMG! You are so talented...this is worthy of any great poet...Shakespeare, Blake, Wilde..It is simply mind-blowing and I think you should get it published or something 'cause it seems too brilliant and perfect for this site. Write more 'cause this took my breath away, I wish one day i could write something close to this. Love, Mia
| glitterjewele 4/26/04 . chapter 1
wow! what an incredible piece! one thing i really loved about this: the tone of the speaker. just something about his/her addresses to the Wise/Dark/High/etc. one, and phrases like "i tire", gave the whole poem this fantastic element of ancient forgotten history and mystery (which i love to read about). the beginning two couplets were phenomenal; hooked me right away. and the final couplet, when the Dark One responds: "no lines, little one, my name is not sand/it's written on the back of Azrael's hand" CHILLS, seriously. i haven't gotten chills from a ficpress poem in AGES. lol nice to have you back. :P anyway, absolutely love this, fantastic work, chica. kudos! :)
| JJR Meerraf 4/26/04 . chapter 2
OMG! (Got tired of saying "Wow" hehe)
This was... beyond really well, excellent might be the same but still I think it falls a little short. This was beautiful! I loved the first four stanzas, where it's only two lines before break. Then I also loved the end of the first long stanza, and a ton of lines in the second long stanza.
There was such a strong mystical sense hanging over this piece, it was breathtaking! Truly wonderful work my friend :)
| Children of the Root 4/26/04 . chapter 1
I love it! Mythology is awesome. I love learning it. Good work it!
| Lellida 4/23/04 . chapter 1
Very abstract, and I don't get quite what it's about. It's still really awesome. I love the description, and the rhythm and stuff. Very chilling, beautiful poem.
| Mime 4/23/04 . chapter 1
Have a bit more confidence! Wait, what am I saying? -_-;;
No really, I LOVED this! Mythology never fails to entrance me, and the way you find a way to flawlessly intertwine two legends is greatly admirable. You deserve nothing short of a gold medal for this one.
| JJR Meerraf 4/21/04 . chapter 1
It is true the rhythm is a little rough, but I loved the mythical sense that you seem to capture so well so many times. Great work, I hope you continue writing!
| CoolBeans18s 4/21/04 . chapter 1
This is brilliant! I *adored* all the references to mythology in here! The abstractness really helped blend all of the different myths. The format is wonderful as welL! I really enjoyed reading this poem.
| Aimee Raven 4/21/04 . chapter 1
Hey! Omg this is gorgeous, and kind of sad but beautiful...you have the best imagery ever..the voncabulary and the knowledge and the depth in the mythology behind all this is stunning. A remarkable poem, wonderful. Please write more! Love, Mia