MORE DESCRIPTION!
Good story otherwise.
Lilith is a little predictable... when you rewrite this try and make her a little less every other hero and more of her own person.
Love Mathin! Classic friend. Reminds me of Sam from LOTR.
Shi-chan

well, i think it could have been better if it was longer, i mean, it would've flowed better. still it was good

I liked it overall, except the descriptions were definitely a little short though... I guess since there was a 1500 word limit, I don't blame you, but it would be better if you were to re-write it adding a little more description.
And Lilith could use a little more work. She is cool, but is a little too predictable.
Good work!

Not bad at all...kind of abrupt, but since it was a short story, I can't really blame you, ne? I liked the way you portrayed the phoenix; I've always thought of them as beings of sorrow, and I think you did that very well. I'd be interested to see this expanded more, with more chapters and descriptions and whatnot, perhaps--if you're interested, that is. The characters are really interesting, even if they are generic (does that make sense? Lilith is the good-girl tomboy heroine--almost a Mary-Sue, but not quite--and Mathin is the geeky sidekick). Overall, this was really interesting, but I think it would be better expanded.