My Goddess...I truly had my breath taken away by this story. The acute pain, the sadness, the disorder that disrupts everyone's lives when someone else's life stops...

Truly, you have captured human emotions. The forgetting...yes, that really does happen.

Your imagery is above and beyond anything I could ever imagine. I could clearly see the scenes, feel the characters, cry for them, hate some of them...

This is truly an amazing piece of work. It touches mind, heart and soul. I commend you deeply.

~Sanguine~

Wow. That was sad. I know what it's like to lose a friend, more than one even, but not like that. That was devestating. The way you sorted it all out and pieced it together was very good. Very good job.

Wow, I liked this story. It's very short and very beautiful. I loved how you turned the characters, even the ones who were supposedly bad, into real people who had personalities. It's always the little things that nobody notices that define people, and you worked that into the story very nicely
-Keilah

it's always those little things that we remember of someone...
and usually, we won't notice those things until they're gone.
good story...
but i think it can be made into a great one if seperated into chapters and putting more information...

This was an incredibly well writeen story. You worked all of the details in without stating them blankly. It was very depressing, which was good (i read it to kick-start my mind.) Your style is very nice, i enjoyed reading this a whole lot. I look forward to reading other works by you. ~Maraih

wow. That's good. it's depressing. I like how you integrated what happened into the story instead of just saying at the very beginning. All the details were really good, from his checkered shirts to disgust of worms. very well done.