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| chardtomp 2004-05-05 ch 1,   | Not a bad start. I like the way you began with an action sequence. At some point you need to explain how a minor comes to be working for a government agency. Do her parents know? Is she an orphan raised in a government institution and trained to be an agent? I'd like to see where you are going with this. |
| Broken Bracelet 2004-04-22 ch 1, | Seems good so far |