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| Selena Fugiami 2004-07-30 ch 2,   | Take real life, add in a mysterious antrho war, and boom! I really like this Takara, Not to mention I think I know where this came from too. ^^ ~Selena |
| hauntingtheliving 2004-06-04 ch 3, | wow, i love the story so far ^^ keep up the good work, cant wait to read more :P |
| Endless Nightmares 2004-05-22 ch 3, | Hey- Well it had some graphic bits and pieces. I think you should have described the deaths more, other than that, good job! |
| Endless Nightmares 2004-05-22 ch 2, | Hello- Interesting chapter. I'm ready for the twsits of this story, hopefully something graphic. |
| Endless Nightmares 2004-05-22 ch 1, | Hello- Your descriptions in this are very dark, and thats what pulls the reader in. I have a feeling, this isn't your best horror yet. Keep writing, and strive for the best. |
| borderline-mary 2004-05-10 ch 3, | This *is* interesting. I'd say it moves a bit too fast for my taste, and I'd appreciate more description of the setting, but overall it definitely captured my attention. Having the third chapter be a strange, out-there flashback kind of makes you wonder why the hell it's in there, which makes you wonder how it ties in, which makes you wonder what happens next--in short, nice touch. Looking forward to more. ^^ |
| Zhane 2004-05-10 ch 3, | Hmm... I'm enjoying this one. I like how you're using the whole past-life shtick to your advantage. I look forward to the next chapter. |
| Sage Valkisco 2004-05-10 ch 3, | Hum...Make the animals seem more sinister...YOu didn't give enough describition...Make them evil...I keep picturing them fuzzy cute animals...More Detail...I'm an aweful hypocrit...But I like the idea... |
| Sage Valkisco 2004-05-09 ch 2, | Is she English? |
| Zhane 2004-05-06 ch 2, | I'm enjoying this. Very amusing and intriguing... I sense a new show on the WB blossoming here... ;) |
| Haitani 2004-04-30 ch 1, | Awesome story. The Japanese names clash too much; otherwise fine. |
| Kitsune, King of Bandits 2004-04-29 ch 1, | Pretty good, but the way that the characters are named is a little off. What are two Japanese people (Haitani and Himura) doing in a place like Iowa? Oh, and the final sentance of the chapter kind of gives away the plot. Other than those, you did pretty well the second time around. |
| Werecat99 2004-04-23 ch 1, | You have an interesting idea here. But you need to "polish" your writing a little so the spookiness of the story can come through the words. Additionally, try to avoid using words like *f@ck*. They might seem to add to the reality of the tale, but in truth they put most readers off. Anyway, good work so far. I'll check back to see how this goes on. |
| Zhane 2004-04-23 ch 1, | mm... I can see this going somwhere I'll give you a cookie if you continue? ^_^ |
| Sage Valkisco 2004-04-23 ch 1, | Woohoo! I like the idea... I feel honored you asked me about it : ) Can't wait for a new chapter |