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| SarahElmore4515 2005-02-11 ch 2,   | Hey Kentes! You Rock, too! Love the story, btw! SEE YA! |
| sorrowofDeirdre 2004-07-14 ch 2, | Hey, man, look, I changed my name! And you've actually written something and put it up. It's taken me forever to review, I know, and I'm SORRY! You're just going to have to live with it though. You're moving a bit too fast. Try describing the surroundings some more. Um...yeah, well that's all I've got to say, so I guess I'll talk to you when you update again. Later! @:) |
| shyXshortieXbabe 2004-05-19 ch 1, | hey that was a great prologue. I like your writing speed, it's not too fast and not too slow. hm...i'd like to have the title explained in another chppie too ^_^ but, i'll review the rest of the story later, lol. keep up the good work ^_^! |
| faerie-gumdrops 2004-04-30 ch 2, | Aww poor Sarah! That Sir Spencer is truly hatable. I feel so sorry for her! Anyway I'm glad that Kriss and Ricky escaped. I also love your descriptions of Fire, Chaos etc, they seem really sinister. |
| faerie-gumdrops 2004-04-30 ch 1, | Omg poor Kriss! Great prologue! It's exciting, enthralling and sweet, everything needed in a story. Well done! |
| Miller8 2004-04-25 ch 2, | Hm... not a BAD opening, I must say. One cannot judge TOO much from the first two chapters, as there is much to be explained that will obviously ve discovered. The story is clear and totally unconfusing at the moment and the character are easily identifiable by their personalities (Sir Spencer is a RIGHT bastard). I'd give it.. hm... perhaps a 30 out of 50? Over half marks, and with time that rating can easily go up. |
| InuyashaLuver99 2004-04-22 ch 2, | Pretty good discriptions-it does seem to be tradgic and mystery...dundundundun! |