The holey hole thingy gets kinda really somewhat sorta kinda redundant.
"Never. Now. I'm seeing everything, and it's scary." Might wanna put a comma after the now.
Interesting introduction, very interesting. It would be nice to see where this goes, keep updating.
Cheers,
D.A.
(P.S. check out Rhythm or Eleven if you get the chance, namely Rhythm, i need more feedback :D)