AWESOME! although if this story is going to have a lot of chapters then slow it down a little. if everything happens too fast then you have to read it more than once to get the whole thing. but the story is really good (i mean really really good)

This is really good. You could use some re-working of paragraphs, and some grammar check, but overall it's a really good story. Please write more!

UPDATE! I've just found this, and it's amazingly awesome. I love it. And I think Smoke might just be my favorite character. Or Wolf. We'll see. :) Please keep writing!

Hi, Krisian, this is Phoenix Queen. I hope that your writer's block is over, or whatever keeps you from writing.

If you have the time, drop by, I recommend you read Paladin--that's the one everyone else likes.

I can't wait to see what happens with Wolf and his sapphire-light power that seems to have come from that broken amulet. *rubs hands* sweet.

:) CD

please please please please update this. please. please please.

Or I will send Truedark mages after you to--do something... or something...

Oh heck. just update.

:) CD

poke. update. poke. update. you were the person who first got me here, it'd be a shame if this was never finished.

:) CD

poke. update. poke. update. poke. update...

:) CD:) PQ from sheroes

o... interesting

good

:) CD (aka Phoenix_queen)

It's nice. A few bits seem a little rushed, but your descriptions of the characters are nice, even if it seems a little odd that they're all named after the animals they turn into. You seem to have put a lot of thought into your characters so it seems odd that the names are such an after-thought. That would be my only major comment, I think the rest o it is alright, it started nicely and the character relationships are going almost as soon as they meet. In short? The writing is good but the names and the title seem un-imaginative.

Hi! It's morph from ff.n. Glad to see you've updated this story. Keep up the good work! :)

So did wolf do something? or eagle? dunhduhnduhn...seems oyu took a pag eout of my book...

here's the edits:

sinleminded is repeated twice, "an unhappy smoke" breaks the flow of your writing, scratch full on, too modern, and though coad is a great name for the creatures don;t use it each and eery time. beast, creature, things, montsters, all these are good synomnymns so you don't get monotunos. (i cna't figure otu how to spell that!!) other than that, all is very well, and REVIEW!

keep working on your story, fellow Shero, or my Mandragori will eat your Dragon. which may not be a bad thing after all...

*poke* that's for not reviewing. *poke* that's for letting crystal lie here like a poor lonely dog when it's jsut getting really good. one commnet on this chapter real fast: smoke would not make a switch that quickly no matter what AMOUNT of loyalty he has. and everyhting (the whole story) could do with some description and pacing. everything just *BAMBAMBAM* make sense? i hope so. *poke* read shadowing!! *poke* review!!\

pS: i can sympathize with the trouble with multitasking but don't let your stories die!

I can't understand why publishers aren't scrambling for this. This is (sorry, Mr. Paolini) potentially better than Eragon. Maybe some work on typos, Maybe a little more info on Erehonn.

Sorry I've been so long in reviewing. This is just for the first chapter by the way. Youve set up the story well, the characters are well set out, though I do not quite get this Dragon character yet, but I probably will when I read more. Any way, this is great.