wonderful images, especially the recurring jewels and shine.
"so you can say that you tamed me
with white light and platinum.." beautiful phrase.

Wonderfully sorrowfull and bitter. You managed to give this an entrancingly beautiful, calm 'voice,' while still expressing a subtle sort of -anger? I'm not sure that's the right word-maybe fear?-about this particular sort of relationship. Made me sick and dazzled at the same time. Excellent.

I love the tone of this...biting and sarcastic and quite unwilling to be a trophy anything. The wordplay in the first stanza ("your progressing domination,/or as I like to call it,/your imminent damnation.") made me smile. And I'm reminded of Satine (Moulin Rouge)...

Wow...such amazing imagery (which I'm still a sucker for)! _ I love this...it's deffinately going in my faves.
Never stop writing :o)

Love this...very nice and anti-materialism. I like the last three lines of the first stanza; they rock my socks. *nods* very nicely done.

I love the idea behind this piece, and the repitition makes it flow so beautifully. Good work.