good question, wat is a beta reader? i wanna noe too~ anyways, this seems to be off to a good start~ hope u continue soon :D

Hey this is sounding interesting, but if u would like some constructive criticism, i would say u might like to have more descriptions (ie. what characters are thinking, doing etc.). anyhow, great work!

cute!

heya, I didn't think this would be to good, BUT I was wrong! would you please r+r my things? I really like this story of yours!