wonderful.
absolutely breathtaking.

Why don't she just tell him how she feels
like you said, the true will set you free
Great poem Question why would she cry if she walked away, I just don't get or better yet tell her to GET OVER IT
TTFN
poem critic

The last two stanzas are esp well-written and so full of lonliness...keep writing..

It's not your best but it isnt bad nothing you write comes out bad its the way emotions are sometimes there is no rhyme scheme or grammar that can truly express the way we feel! good job

wow! sounds like i can actually hear you talking to this guy...i loved your use of repition and your rhyme scheme... and your word choices...thanks for sharing and keep on writing!

No it's not bad! it's good. I've often felt/ wondered the same thing! Don't insult your work when you've got no reason to!

You have a great sense of rhythm, but I like the emotion which comes across. I like the underlying question: Are we communicating? Of course, the uncertainity is what makes the poem emotional.

hey, i like this one! deep... keep on writing!

This isnt bad i think its great, the rhymn and steady rhythm give it certainty and its really lovely. i like it. you show your emotions really well in the poem.

Great Job.