 Miss.Broadway 2008-11-18 . chapter 1Yay! What an awesome fic! :) |
 QuartzQuill 2008-05-31 . chapter 21First of all, I didn't review all the other chapters because I was so hooked. So, here is my review. Forgive any spelling errors as I am in a rush.
Anyways - I love Alli as a character. She is spunky but clumsy, and not very confident of herself. To top that off, she has a mysterious power to read minds. It's really a very good blend. All in all, I think she's well developed.
The contrast between her and Tristan is also very satisfying; I also like the fact that Alli can't really read Tristan's mind...I wonder how he would react if she told him about this uncanny ability to read thoughts.
Moving on, I don't think that this story is moving too slowly. All the parts are carefully fleshed out, and I can get a good understanding and grip of each chapter. Keep up the good work, and I shall be looking forward to more chapters!
Sorry that the review was so long, but this story deserves it. ^-^ |
 Trory4ever 2008-01-11 . chapter 21really great story. i cant wait to see what is going to happen next. and I know all about hectic life things getting in the way and time going by way too fast. congrats with keeping up with everything and i look forward to the next chapter. keep up the great work
Michelle |
 Blackened Blood 2008-01-10 . chapter 21I Love this story, very well writing and i love the plot. Please update soon! |
 Skeeter the Groundhog 2008-01-04 . chapter 21yay! they kissed! hooray for happy moments!
it's about time you updated, but i must say i haven't done much better. i'm glad things are going well for you and keep up the good work! |
 person with a smile 2008-01-04 . chapter 2 this is random, but i like how you don't have to be a "member" of fictionpress just to comment.
this is also random, but I always wished that some hot guy lived near enough to go to my bus stop.
Laugh out loud!! I love what she says to the guy at her bus stop!
All I have to say is "Por dearrie..." |
 smiles make my day 2008-01-04 . chapter 1 You know, i never really knew what tourette's was. I just thought it was weird people whogrunted and said profane words without meaning to. But now I see that it really isn't all that, so I'm going to read your story, because it seems really awesome and you seem like a pretty awesome writer.
I feel bad for the narrator. I mean, to go through school like that. Even the most mundane incidents at my school get me upset. I can't imagine having tics as well...
did tristan's dad sell the house they lived in?
i think you should revamp the first chapter a little bit, though. there's an error somewhere in the middle when the narrator trips katherine in elementary school.
Also, What the ᄄC ? Was she kidding me?
that's there too. Somewhere. do a ctrl+find.
good job, i really enjoy this! |
 secret thoughts revealed 2008-01-02 . chapter 21hi finally so she confronts him at last sort of. great chapter hope it doesnt take too long till we get the next installment |
 =] 2008-01-01 . chapter 4 just to mention something...falling asleep on the roof is never a safe thing. Nor is traversing around on one. But that's just me. =] Wow, Alli has very interesting character. She makes a reference to being a superhero but the notion never occurred to me! But in a way, yeah, she kinda is a superhero!
Another thought--wow, you wrote this story before the Ipod, didn't you? Because it's CD player, not Ipod.
OOh, laugh! She nearly ran over Tristan!!
Wow, I love your story!! Please keep updating!!=] |
 Adeleste 2008-01-01 . chapter 21Wow, might I saw that, though the wait, this chapter was exceptional? I had this giddy smile on my face the entire time, similar to the smile on my face whenever there's mr. darcy. Alli is such a great character, because we can actually relate to her. Though she is SLIGHTLY on the paranoid side, it's realistic--congrats, you didn't overdo anything.
More drama. This is good. So who's it going to be between-Tristan or Lucius? And what's the major conflict of the story? I'm curious!! Please update soon, you are a superlative author. From the sounds of it, life is pretty busy for you, but of course--college apps!! Good luck on them, but I have this gut feeling that you'll do fine.
*squeal* Tristan and Alli kiss!
Oh. Right. Did I not establish that that was the hilight of this chapter?
Much love,
.Adeleste. |
 xxily4everxx 2008-01-01 . chapter 21hmm its a good story... |
 ANGEL992210 2007-03-11 . chapter 20Amazing story.Update soon. |
 RW W 2007-02-21 . chapter 20 Great chap, even thru the irony that I'm going to a professional phantom production in the near future ~.~ |
 rw w 2007-02-15 . chapter 5 bwahahahahaha i was correct! im not gunna actually leave usful r&rs until theyl be of use... + i right them on my psp and its a pain... |
 rw w 2007-02-15 . chapter 4 OMG! Tristan is going to be the presidents son! great story |