I will worship you today, yesterday and tomorrow;
Even if it only brings me sorrow.
Your really good at making one line stand out above all the rest and relating to the reader. Lovin' it lots
Jamie

*the silver flash of your laugh*
That was a beautiful line. I don't know much about sonnets, but I think they're supposed to have a syllable scheme or something. Oh well, correct me if I'm wrong...

just for future reference, it is possible to just dash down your thoughts and still rhyme... check out my poem violent love... i wrote it in three minutes... when i was really mad.
~blackpowderchick

Greatly described emotion! I can relate!
~Salix Nigra~

wow...would not like to be on your bad side right now. whats eating you? its not one of my favourites, partly coz i dont like to think of you being THAT sad and partly bcoz its a bit heavy. on the other hand very emotional. good work. and cheer up. :)
-die-hard-fan-