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| a silenced revolution 2007-03-19 ch 1,   | You say so much with few words, which is the ultimate goal of a short poem I believe. Good work. |
| Manju 2005-05-13 ch 1, | u say so much in so little words; great job! |
| Cymoril Avalon 2004-10-14 ch 1, | I really like the form of all of your poetry, they're visually pleasing, and your insistence on not capitalizing anything really adds to the atmosphere of the works. You're able to say a whole lot in very few words, and that's a gift many strive for. Brevity is the soul of wit, after all, though I can't remember who said that. |
| mizutenchi22 2004-08-12 ch 1, | Needs more imagery, but I really liked this piece. Your describing words are very powerful..especially "poisoned". Try to relate your describing words with an image or theme...such as a snake or another symbol of evil. Nice work! |
| JustForgetMe 2004-08-12 ch 1, | I know all too much how you feel.I love it.Its short and very good. |
| SleepDontWeep 2004-07-31 ch 1, | wow! with such little words u really made me think! i love it!! WELL DONE!! could u check out some of my stuff? xx |
| Avery Rose 2004-07-21 ch 1, | I think that sometimes the shortest little things say the most |
| INTP 2004-06-28 ch 1, | I like how your poems sound like snippets of thought and the reader is caught somewhere between the beginning and the end of it. Makes it very cryptic and surreal. |
| CrimsonEnchantress 2004-06-25 ch 1, | you know, your poems imply so much, and I like that, but I don't at the same time. There's so many possiblities its impossible to know exactly what you're describing, yet you still manage to portray the emotion perfectly through those few words. and from that I gather your have incredible potential. i hope to see some longer poems from you. i like how this is called losing sanity, whereas your name is finding sanity. its interesting in this poem how things contrast each other. this person with his 'lies and poisoned reasoning' honestly sounds like an abusive..whomever that that has hurt you in one of the worst ways possible. I think of all of your poems so far, this may just be the darkest and most realistic (to me). it also happens to be my favourite. |
| Screw4Virginity 2004-06-14 ch 1, | Really beautiful. As always. |
| Sillygoose49 2004-06-08 ch 1, | I like this one too! this poem makes you think a bit, which is really cool. Sillygoose |
| Birdaloo 2004-06-08 ch 1, | story of my life. going onto my favorites list. this one is really, EXTREAMILY well done! ~Birdy |
| Breaking Heart 2004-06-04 ch 1, | there is a mix of reactions going on in all the other reviews,and maybe that says it all.i think that it makes sense and you did a perfectly good job putting into words how you feel.keep writing. irish lover |
| oasispegasus 2004-05-07 ch 1, | jaw hits floor again. |
| Dream of Hope 594 2004-05-06 ch 1, | i don't know there is something missing but the essence is good |