Nice, I liked it, could really feel the emotions. Thanks for reviewing my haiku A Beautiful Nightmare and my song Silver Tears.
HtW

Hm... not bad. Could rearrange some stuff but it's good as it is.

What i think may matter not to you, but i think you shouldn't change it. The first time you put the words down it means the most. When you try and change the poem afterwards, it is almost as if you are trying to change how you feel. I thought it was beautiful by itself. Don't change a thing.

I'd probably cut out the lines about emotion and stick to the physical symbology. Good feel to it, though.