Now I understand what you mean when you said I need more detailed descriptions from just reading this story... They were thoroughly written and grammar checked... very well done... Just too tell you... when you said I needed more details, do you mean the characters? I didn't add anything for the main characters but then I totally forgot about the smaller characters... thanks for reminding me... I just wrote this today so... yeah... and your review did not offend me at all... it actually surprised me that someone took the time to read the whole story and tell me that I have good grammar... thank you again...

It's got potential, I'd say. If you'll excuse my incessant thinking; I would LOVE to know who the two peoples involved in thsi battle are. I sit here reading this and already a thousand different possibilites arise for past, future, and the soon to come.