I like the idea of this story a lot; the world you have built has a lot of potential for suspense, mystery, etc. I think it needs to be fleshed out, though; often you take the cliched shortcut of telling us instead of showing us. And please find a beta, or read through more carefully yourself! Often you use a similar sounding word instead of the one you want (see: muddle). Spellcheck can't fix everything.

TERRIBLE ending.
as an author you should know better.
amazing story ):

Don't tell me that was the real end.
If it is, that's a ** ending. It leaves too many lose ends. I want to know if Gunther and Archer ever get together, and more on Mercer and Shen. This is a really good story, and is really addicting. I don't want that to be the end. D:

This is a awesome story! I had read it so many times and never review it! What a bad fan! lol love it!

the best story i've ever read ... i would like to see Archer with Gun but it was still a very beatifully written story! i want to read more of their adventures ...

Awesome ending. I hope there is sequel to it, I'm going to miss this story. The characters were very interesting and the plot amazing. I really had fun reading it.

no i want more this i a good story i love it 12 chapters is in no way enough in my eyes its just to good

Lol, I so got to read the rest. I adore Gunther and Adir. (However I keep imagining Gunther bigger than Archer...idk either)


Other than that, great story!!

Awesome story. I love every single character (the good guys of course)especially Adir.

Is the cat necklace a idea taken from spy kids two??
I like the story so far
-emma

hhahhahha oh gawd! still loving the story. but i think merc waltezed right bsck in a little too abruptly dont ya think?. ah im way to tired to keep going,doh!. i shall havta keep reading tomorrow, when my eyes hopefully will not be burning.

aw ao cute! i found this chapter easier to read. still typos and **, but wateva. oh gawd i hope adir cuts his friken hair!

ok so i really REALLY like this story, but i find it very hard to follow your writing. i think your a good writer, but it needs to be proof read i guess? it gets kind of confusing when i dont know whos sayign what, and sometimes it seemed jumpy. but i really really liked it so i must keep reading!

Sorry I've been silently lucking and haven't reviewed before, I'm just getting the hang of this and plan to do it all the time in the future.

I love the CRDP stories. Adir and Mercer are two for my favorite characters of all the fiction I've read. Their interaction from the beginning of the story makes them 'real'. They make you want to get to know the group and you feel all of their emotions as you write them. The stories in themselves suck you in and you just want to read them over and over again. They are well written and thought out form a number of sides, you feel like it's just not one character's perspective that you are witnessing.

I hope that you are planning to add more cases to the CRDP files. I definitely will be up for an investigation.

This is my second time reading your story. I was wondering how do you pronounce their names? This story does need a beta.