My favorite so far. Faster rhythm, angsty, and not at all forced. Flows well. Slower-paced poems are easier to make flow, but this is my favorite of yours that I've read.

I love the poem, but I am not sure that I like the format. I think it would have worked better, seperated at the slashes.

this is one of the most unique things I have seen.. this is the first poem of yours I've read, and the ryme is incredable..honestly, the way you put it together is like nothing I have ever seen before, and I love it. It's very quick, very malodic... a true masterpiece... you get my rare approval... from the most over-confident-in-his-own-abilities man alive... I could never do anything that good...

This was really good. I write lots of poems this length and lots even shorter. I think the length has nothing to do with a good poem. Haiku poems have only 17 syllables in them and some are really beautiful. This poem was wonderful and made very valid points. I really enjoyed reading this. The meaning behind it is very true. Keep up the amazing work.
You keep writing...
I'll keep reviewing.
T.T.F.N.

wow, awesome! flowed very nicely! i liked it a lot. thank you for the review and your poem is awesome. keep writing and have fun!