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| Sunne 2005-05-08 ch 8,  | abuseHaha...clean Jess CLEAN! Nice chapter...can't wait for the next one:) ~~Sunne~~ |
| Never Knows Best 2005-05-06 ch 8, | abuseHahahaq, funny chapter.WHat a neat freak. Although...I think a bathroom like that would drive even ME into a cleaning frenzy.~Lee |
| aj 2005-05-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseluved it! keep writing!! |
| Sunne 2005-02-27 ch 7, | abuseDude update! I love this. Jess now has a home...I'm so glad :) Please update soon. ~~Sunne~~ |
| Quantum 2004-11-20 ch 7, anon. | abuseI'm so glad you've continued. Thought you'd given up on this story. Which would have been a shame, really.I like how you made Jessica this seemingly strong persona teetering on the edge of collapse and then pushed her over the edge with that accident. Her psychadelic reactions after being drugged - giving in to the weepy emotions and all - is very human. She's no little miss perfect after all.She is the most defined character. Am hoping you'll be able to flesh out the guys as much as you've breathed life into your main character.Here's looking to what new life awaits Jess in Chapt 8. |
| Kaiyu Onibaba 2004-11-10 ch 7, | abuseVery interesting! That was a cute chapter, not to menton funny. I wonder what will happen with Jessica... |
| Dream Fox 2004-11-10 ch 7, | abusesweet! this is definately a nice sappy story, just the kind of thing i was in the mood for! please continue soon! |
| Dream Fox 2004-09-05 ch 6, | abuseAi, this is looking so cool! I like this story a lot, and now it looks like she's on her way to finally gaining some friends! YAY! |
| xTamx 2004-08-21 ch 6, | abuseGreat story! Its weird, cos I've never really thought about how being homeless like that. Now that I think about it its pretty easy to get homeless.. and not easy to stop being homeless. lol well anyways amazing story mate! Update asap! |
| Never Knows Best 2004-08-20 ch 6, | abuseAnd here I was thinking that things couldn't get much worse for the poor girl. Guess I was wrong. Okay...broken arm, possible concussion...that's not too bad is it. Oh yay, and there's no such thing as free health care int eh States is there? I don't know if the irony is funny or...well, not funny. ~NKB~ |
| Never Knows Best 2004-08-06 ch 5, | abuseMan, that just plain sucks. Seriously. If I were her I'd contemplate murder. Possibly using the evil **-woman nazi boos of hers...or even the annoying police officer as my victim. I'd bury them under my pool...except if I were her I wouldn't have a pool. In fact, I wouldn't even have a place to stay. Which brings us back to the beginning of...that just plain sucks. ~Lee~ |
| Kaiyu Onibaba 2004-06-30 ch 4, | abuseWoot! Cool, cool. Update soon! |
| fynley 2004-05-15 ch 1, | abusei absolutely love the very beginning. you get across such a strong image and background with just a few words. it's so easy to understand what your character is feeling. and i liked the children of the corn bit! :) |
| Tigger-180 2004-05-15 ch 4, | abusewo more please! |
| Never Knows Best 2004-05-15 ch 4, | abuseCami is a **. I hope someone sets her on fire. ~Lee~ |