 A.D Williams 2004-06-07 . chapter 1wow. Within this short poem, you have constructed so much POWER. When you stated:
"Like a frosty rose she is, pretty inside, but they're scared to touch her, because they may stick and it may hurt"
Such emotion and deep power poured from the lines. The comparrison in this poem is amazing. Very original, and very beautiful!
-Amber |
 Leikaiya 2004-06-06 . chapter 1I like...
Roses have been used so often in regard to relationships and romance, both the petals and the thorns, but I don't think I've ever read about icy ones before...
I really admire the twist in your last line. Saved the poem (in my eyes) from becoming another sappy "but-it'll-be-all-better-soon!" poem. |