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| fallin4ualwayz 2006-07-08 ch 1,   | very well-written! |
| Charlotte the Poet 2006-06-06 ch 1, | good.just maybe change over an over an over to over and over and over.unless that was on purpopse |
| Decollage 2005-12-09 ch 1, | Frank, matter-of-fact, and the format reflects. 'Rinse Repeat' Brilliant. |
| Ellin Louise 2005-07-08 ch 1, | Good poem, the short lines give it a good rhythm. |
| Clap Clap Raise Your Hands 2005-06-02 ch 1, | very cool use of listing, i love the ending too. sometimes the best poems are written in a shart space of time, sometimes the words just come to you which makes this peace so fresh, very interesting piece x weasel within x |
| Noir Fleurir 2005-05-09 ch 1, | nice work i like this poem keep it up |
| pointythings 2005-03-19 ch 1, | This is really cool; it's like it's telling a story in 3-word lines. There are a couple of places where it seems like you split up a line just to keep the lines short, though; maybe you could find a way to get around that. I really like the "rinse, repeat" metaphor; also the "picking petals off a flower". Details and metaphors like that go a long way in this kind of poem; maybe you could include a little more of that, even. Anyway, this is really cool! |
| deletedfpaccount 2004-09-28 ch 1, | i like! the short lines increase the chaotic sense of the poem while adding to its structure, and it tells its tale, albeit subtlely, nicely. i love "Rinse / Repeat" and its random placement among all these other more heartfelt words. two thumbs up! :) -claire |
| Sanqhian 2004-06-14 ch 1, | Wow, this explains just how I feel now. What a beautiful poem. Please, keep writing. |
| Miss W D Halliwell 2004-05-07 ch 1, | Very true. I like the way it is laid out. WD |