very well-written!

good.just maybe change over an over an over to over and over and over.unless that was on purpopse

Frank, matter-of-fact, and the format reflects.

'Rinse

Repeat'

Brilliant.

Good poem, the short lines give it a good rhythm.

very cool use of listing, i love the ending too. sometimes the best poems are written in a shart space of time, sometimes the words just come to you which makes this peace so fresh, very interesting piece x weasel within x

nice work i like this poem keep it up

This is really cool; it's like it's telling a story in 3-word lines. There are a couple of places where it seems like you split up a line just to keep the lines short, though; maybe you could find a way to get around that. I really like the "rinse, repeat" metaphor; also the "picking petals off a flower". Details and metaphors like that go a long way in this kind of poem; maybe you could include a little more of that, even. Anyway, this is really cool!

i like! the short lines increase the chaotic sense of the poem while adding to its structure, and it tells its tale, albeit subtlely, nicely. i love "Rinse / Repeat" and its random placement among all these other more heartfelt words. two thumbs up! :)
-claire

Wow, this explains just how I feel now. What a beautiful poem. Please, keep writing.

Very true. I like the way it is laid out. WD