Karasu! How are you doing? I decided to drop by and say hello to all of my long-time fictionpress friends. I hope that you are doing well. Please let me know if you need reviews or help or anything at all, neh?

Lovely work here. While normally crafting ideas around a rhyme scheme is difficult pull of, you have the talent and technique to make it work for you. Very, very nice work. Concise, lovely. I enjoyed it. But remember you don't always have to rhyme, in fact personally I've found free verse as a good basic foundation for my work. I can rhyme if I want, or if I feel it will add something to parts of the poem but since I've taken up mostly free verse I've really been able to express myself more freely. But this is just me mind you, you might find rhyme is just the kind of lieterary pruning you need to poetically flourish. In any case best of luck and keep on writing. ^_^

Hey this is cool! I like it too. I want to see the picture! *puppy face* ^_^
Yeah, fictionpress can be really annoying with the formatting sometimes. To get 3 dots you need to turn off the autocorrect thing on word that makes three periods in a row into an elipsis. Or put a space between the periods.

heehe...angsty...emotive...yet...so...simple! i like.
sorry, can't promote you for writing so good! :P lol

Yeah... that little 3 dot thingy happened on FF.net awhile ago too ><
Stuffed up all me fics... and all the paragraphing stuffs up too ><
Ah well, good poem!

WOW JUST WOW
THE POEM SPEAKS
YOU HAVE A GREAT TALENT
I ENVY YOU
YOU HAVE THE TALENT TO INVOKE FELLINGS INTO MY HEART
WOAH