AW! u r so caring 2 just write this 4 ur friend! i would never write a poem 4 my friends, it was a gr8 poem. hope ur friend forgave u! )*confwuzzled*

Wow, great I love it! I don't really write poetry, I just ramble and my friend turns it into a poem.

Cool and metaphory but a little ambiguous.
Nymph

you seem like a very caring person, perhaps its ur friends then that have the problem and not you... either way, nice poem!

I really like this poem. it really expresses how tou feel. Keep up the good work.

Well written and your feelings shine through. I do hope you are forgiven.
keep writing-
till-iburnout

You can't always be aware of how your actions are going to affect others. I like the last line of this, it's a good way to end it. Nice work

YOu shouldn't be the one feeling crappy because it's my fault. I really didn't think it was going to work out that way. I just told her and did not think she would mind. I guess I was wrong. I'm sorry Jake.

the poem-great. but. a reference to what you did exactly would be nice, whether implicit or explicit. Yes, we know what happened because it is in the summary, but would your readers know what you were trying to get across if the poem stood alone? Nice use of free verse. Hope you are forgiven. Hope she feels better.
love, peace, & chicken grease (hehe)
bluefaerie33

that blows. your words are beautiful. the last line especially. *thumbs up*

It sucks when you find out that you hurt a friend without knowing, doesn't it?
Yeah, I know what you mean.
Hope she won't stay angry.
Like your poem - even though it sounds more like a story to me.