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Hello. I enjoy your stories. But you haven't updated. That makes me sad. Ntohing more to say. ~SupRStaR~

Before reading this third chapter, I noticed that this story hasn't been updated in a while. I hope you will continue it, because I'm enjoying it.
This chapter was clever, I liked the hiding place of the girl/charm. It was nice and long as well. I can relate to what you expressed in your author's note- it does make sense on paper. My problem is actually getting it down, usually...
I still would like to see more character descriptions around the dialogue, but overall I have enjoyed this story and I would like to see more of it. I'll make sure to check out some of your other stuff, too.

Nice plot exposition; it doesn't seem forced like in some stories I've read and it's moving along at a good pace. I like the deja vu feeling at the beginning of the chapter. As before, I would have liked a little more description of the characters, especially in the longish dialogue section here.

This is a really interesting idea, responding to the author's note, it does seem anime-inspired (in a good way). It makes sense enough as the beginning of a story, don't worry.
Slight complaints are: I could do with a bit more description of the characters, and around the end of the second part of the first chapter the part that says "She assumed it had caught the light" seemed a bit unnecessary to me.

love the story! It's cool how not all the charms will agree to help her:) yay for suspense!!
~the light