Um...I liked the idea of the poem, but...I have to disagree. On the contrary, autistic kids have heightened senses. They love more, hear more, see more...they are like rubies in a box of crystals. But I like that you wrote a poem for these kinds of kids.
p.s. My little brother is autistic

Wow, this is really good, and full of feeling. I would put it under angst, not suspense, but that’s just me. Anyway, very good job.

Oh... nice. Very very effective, but the second last line is a little long in comparison to the rest. It just affects the tone... lalala. Even though it is short, it's powerful. You really should write more
~Karasu