yes you are a really good writer i think i especially like the thing about intestines...it's really good when you use metaphors so maybe you should use them more often...well anyway i'm gonna read more of your poems now

Beautiful! The last two lines iare very cute, but true. Your song from third grade does have a lot of potential! My first song (which will never be posted) was written when I was in third grade doesn't even come close how good yours is!
-Silver-