woah... rhyming without sounding.. err.. 'pre-school'ish ^^ very nice.. keep up the good work!

Wow, nicely done. Somtimes when I'm down I feel exactly like that. It has a nice kind of rhythm to it too. I never seem to catch an on going rhythm to my poems. Anyway: Thumbs up! ^.^

Sad, poignant, a truth which is cutting! Well written, well done!
Goddess Bless!