Cliffhanger! What does the Storm Falcon want with poor Lylie? And why did the pixie kill all those people? I really like the pixie (name?) and I hope the next chapter tells us a little more about him/her. ^-^

At some parts funny, in others stupid.
But more stupid parts than funny ones, so that a problem.
Your good but you need to pratise more.
Alex.

lo-hove it! Keep goin' boyo!

Hm...confusing but also funny...I think... :)

MUST HAVE 2'D CHAPTER!! MUST MUST MUST!! UGGH!