God I love your Writings! Keep writing

Myztikal

This has a kind of Evanescence feel to it which I really like but it's really original as well. Beautiful ending! QueenVixta

a great song
with lots of potential.

wow... sounds evanescence-esque great work!

this is a good song, its so good.. there is no words for it. I feel like that a lot some ppl should just suffer for putting us threw so much pain. good job
living in death

Some of the lines are a little melodramatic and awkward at times, and I'd get rid of the 'Chorus" bits unless you're putting it in the song section. There are some good lines that work, and the poem just needs a little bit more polish. Overall, not bad! Keep it up.