I like the idea of childrens' rhymes.
Ha, again, "Ashes to ashes, All fall down" Dave Matthews used.
You do good work. I would've cut this one down a little though. It almost seems like it drags on.
Good ideas in there though.

I really like this one. It'll sound awsome behind some music.

One of the best so far!! I'm going to have fun imaging a rythm that fits this one! Psychotic is good unlike life which is pretty meaningless when yuo have no one to protect.