yeah could be longer, i love the lines, but i duno, more context would give these more significance, although that would be quite ironic seeing as the whole point is that humans are just insignificant in this giant huge universe, hmm maybe just keep the poem like this then! x weasel within x

Why make it longer? I see it as a small child whispering into the night sky sparkling with stars. It's touching and definately has that "aw" factor.
Hawke

I don't see any reason why this should be made longer. If that's where your imagination takes you, then so be it. But I see nothing wrong with poetry that is short. I actually rather like this one. It's so calming and soothing. Very soft imagery. )

Beautiful. I'd quote my favorite part, but I would have to put the whole poem in here. I love this "unnaturally short" poem.

sigh...how wonderous beautiful matthew!

out of your poems, probably your shortest, but my definate favorite. have you ever read ezra pound? he wrote some beautiful short poetry like this. look him up if you can.

This really is obscure, not even really a poem, more than just a quote. *

You said this wasn't much to look at but I would disagree. This is really beautiful. The first line is unique, I love that line even by itself. I'm adding this to my favorite stories.

Good one, as usual! I think it might be better if you made it a bit longer though.

short but sweet...hopefully kinda like this review...
chloe

aha... short is an understatement! :P lol no. Still you've managed to capture the image, it's really good.
Karasu

talk about short, lol! i like! captures what ur saying beautifully!