|Reviews for Hello Kitty|
| eszabo 5/20/13 . chapter 33
Hehe- now for a lot of so's.
The story was SO cute, and Lira is SO connectable with! (Grammar?) Jude is SO hot and SO... Perfect?
Last. Your writing is SO good, and while there were some lulls and skipping, you made me tear through the (albeit virtual) pages.
And a P.S.- Blair and Mahew is SO gross! Don't even get me started! :P
Stay amazingly amazing, Endless Dark!
| Tweetybird79 5/19/13 . chapter 1
| Raylis 5/12/13 . chapter 33
Cute story :) Thanks!
| SMinelis 4/18/13 . chapter 33
Aww I LOVE IT their relationship is intresting
| Hazine 4/12/13 . chapter 33
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| hairy-mammoth 3/21/13 . chapter 25
OH MY GOODNESS NO WAY
| Trying-Helps 3/9/13 . chapter 2
The writing is good and you do have a plot. I hope you make a nice funny story. Also please take the good person test. It's a really good test that you can find on Google that tells you a lot about yourself. It's usually the second or third search down.
| DLiz 3/6/13 . chapter 33
Like you said, ending was anti climatic but overall the story was well written and I enjoyed reading it:)
| Novella 2/22/13 . chapter 33
A few spelling mistakes and typos all throughout the story since my last review but definitely nothing a quick run through Microsoft Word would detect. Please consider that. Also, what really irked me was that you kept using “Keenan‘s“ to address the Keenan family. I advise you to delete the apostrophe in all instances as you are referring to the plural of Keenan, rather than something to do with ownership, if that makes sense?
I also noticed that as the story progressed, you dissolved your writing to something that was 80 percent dialogue. Although it served quite nicely to express each character‘s personality well, it seriously out me off. I felt like I was reading a chatroom transcript or something. That said, I suggest you add more prose when you decide to rewrite this story and focus on the setting; background; character‘s mannerisms or SOMETHING a bit more. Your writing style is nice and you have a vast vocabulary to compliment that but I just wish you used that to its full extent.
The ending was all right. I felt you rushed it a bit though, so it seemed anti-climactic.
Thanks for the read, nevertheless. I hope you don‘t take this as a flame as I was merely trying to give you some constructive criticism. If you wish to contact or reply to me, my username on FP is Of Sapphires and Quicksilver. Thanks again.
| Novella 2/20/13 . chapter 3
“...this trust fund enters the mess; his grandmother set up for him...“ - The semi-colon isn‘t necessary here. The sentence is fine without it. Considering the fact that semi-colons aren‘t commonly used punctuation, I found that it kind of distracted me from the story.
Also, you used ‘loosing‘ instead of ‘losing‘ in your Author‘s Note at the end. ;)
I enjoyed this chapter simply because there‘s a lot of explaining done regarding their situation.
| Novella 2/20/13 . chapter 2
“...and while she wasn‘t usually one disposed to tattoo‘s...“ - I think you got carried away here due to the use of apostrophe-S in the title, but use the proper plural form of tattoo here. ;)
I enjoyed this chapter and haha, it was great to see that they‘re both slowly remembering last night‘s events. When I first started reading this, I was worried it would drag on but thank you for putting those worries to rest. :)
| Novella 2/20/13 . chapter 1
I just came across this today and I‘m glad I did. I like your writing style; it‘s very unique. Your characters are well-written and realistic too! The part where Jude inspects the waste bin and counts the condoms... Lol, what the hell. xD I can‘t wait to plow through this story. :)
| Emily Peralli 2/12/13 . chapter 33
Hi! Just wanted to let you know that this story and i have a Jude/Lira relationship - I loved the story and it filled my day with joyful laughter but it was also a amazing distraction from studying and is definitely going to impact my history mark lol :) Anyway your very talented so thanks for the great read :)
| BookLover-xx 2/8/13 . chapter 1
Oh my god Ahahaha I love it, it's hilarious!
| SoulSweeper 2/6/13 . chapter 33
I loved the story couldn't stop reading it!