this thing is quite hard to read because it's just ONE paragraph. can't you do smth about that?

Oh, this is good.
4 of 6

Anyway
I'm glad things are looking up

4 of 5
things kind of got conffusing with dialogue

The dialogue got a little conffusing here
4 of 5...oh and Joe's outburst was actually really refreshing, something that Rob needed to hear.

Damn, just when things go good for rob God throws a curb ball (lol).

5 of 5, i really like how this is going, I like the raw emotion that seems to vibrate underneath the surface of this entire story. It's all very delisicious

Okay, so the chapter is just a little bit pointless...and obviously the couple are going to face hardships (Otherwise your readers would loose interest...)
so yeah.

3 of 5

oh me want cookies!

Sorry, back to the main review thing

I liked this chapter no matter how cheesy it is.

Anyway...yeah...so I like the straight robert better then the Gay one...please oh please keep him this way...I like reading about oposite sex interraction...Did i just say that?

oh and 5 of 5

Bisexual...I hope he goes one way or the other...

4 of 5

Oh someone's cudling!
Sorry bout that

So it's a 5 of 5

OH thank god, i hated that dude, he's like...Blech!
I mean it's not like i'm a homophobe or anything but...he was just wrong!

4 out of 5

Nice.
4 of 5

OH god

3 out of 5
for being so short

Yeah, Is it me or am I seeing sparks with what's her face Kathereine?
Will they end up together? Or will they not?

Hmm...
It'll be interesting to see how THIS one turns out
4 of 5

It's me...

AGAIN

This is cool, I'm not sure how it'll turn out, if the dude will sway to the natrual urges of most dudes or if the girl will try to taste the forbidden fruit. Only time will tell!

5 of 5