Shit, that was beautiful.

Beautifully written. I don't know what to say really, it's just a breath of fresh air to read something this deep. The emotions that flow through your story, through the characters, are so complex but you relay them perfectly. I'm very happy I found this story, it really made my day to read it.

I loved it. I liked it even. Not much to say from there. Yeah, whole tons of angst.

Oh my god.
well written, sad ending.

That was so sad, but it was such an amazing story, from the way it was written to the storyline. I'm just wondering...is it a true story?
Loved it! =)
~mia

Good God, that had to have been one of the best one-shot's I've ever read on this site.

Wow.

I'm not sure who wrote this, your or your friend, but I'm guess ing your friend? Anyway, It was great. That's all I have to say, just great.

HOLY FUCKING CRAP. This was AMAZING. Tragic, but fucktastically amazing. ~bow~ Excellent job. This goes on my favorites. :)

~seraphim-rush

omg I'm crying. this was the best story ever read in my life.

i really like the ending to this, i found it extremely hot for some odd reason. dont ask. ^^ keep writing and btw could you maybe update on your other story please? ciao

I love it. It is so well written!

He turns to you, and his eyes are blank. I know it hurts you, and part of me wants to kill him for making you feel that way. If it has to be him, and not me, then why can't he appreciate it? Why can't he be glad that he has what I never will?

I love this part. It's how I feel about a guy, so I know exactly how he's feeling. The pain, the confusion, the whole mix of feelings. It's really a great story. Tell your friend that he should write some more.

I'm kind of confused. Did the knife sink in to his chest when he stumbled, or did he do it to hinmself. And what was between his legs that made him stumble?

Wow! That was...powerfull, and meaningfull. And it was depresingly sad... I love it!

Holy crap. I am actually crying right now. I'm still recuperating. That was unbelievably powerful.

The first thing I'd say about this is that it's a little, well, melodramatic. Your friend didn't have to kill his main character to get his point across, I don't think. On the other hand, I went through a melodramatic phase of my own, and this is much better written than anything I was writing back then. The technical aspects, voice and style and word choice and all that, are great. Your friend sounds like a young or novice writer with a lot of talent.

Wow. That's all I can say right now. Just...wow. That was powerful!