   wilderness 2004-05-11 . chapter 1humm, interesting. usually i dont like stories which are just dialogues, but i did like yours!!
'Sam pause and let Josh take it in for a moment. "He never says it, but he does. In his way.”' is it meant to be sam paused?? just a mistake i caught up on.
very good though, i will read more by you!
will u R&R my stuff?
lani |
 deafguy 2004-05-10 . chapter 1Well, I strolled by and just happened to stumble onto this story by accident, and intrigued, interested, i started reading... and then I saw the author's nam, and ooh, it seemed familiar... is that you, Newly Human?! ;)
My gosh, I haven't seen you in a long, long time, where have you been?! Last I saw you was in January, 2004... ;)
Heheheh, and where does this story remind me of, eh? It's on the tip of my tongue but I can't seem to for the life of me remember...! ;)
If I didn't know better, you would be infringing on copyright..! ;) :P
Anyway, in addition to what I said earlier, I liked that it's so meaningful, and it should've been trite because it's short, but it just reminds me of the universal human condition that is unrequited love, and the characters that get unwittingly involved... And Sam? I guess the reason I assumed she was a female was cos she seemed to have a feminine voice... not that it's any problem :P
That's it, and I'll send you the emails of the business logo, and John just came home from work, which is how late this review is :P But that's cos I had stuff to do first, so nyah.
BYE!
Ooh, saw this thing below that said I should 'use this opportunity on an aspect of the story that can be improved'... Let's see, write longer and yet at the same time, let words speak for themselves, lol. Sorry, bit of a rush :P
It's been great hearing from you again after such a... long time ;) |
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